all these even spaces
in between
of where once
were you and me
all these precious traces
of us
we wipe convincingly
fingerprints free
every little breath
we draw in inspiration
each tender sigh and ragged cry
are made into an idiosyncrasy
of compulsive even spaces
between affirmation and deniability
one last trial
this mourning
for crushed expired moments
we scrutinize to file, orderly
under uncontrollable possibility
2 comments:
several lines hit me here:
the entire opening
"wipe...fingerprints free"
"between affirmation and deniability"
"crushed expired moments...we scrutinize to file....uncontrollable possibility"
Your observations of emotions put this way, you can see, I admire your word choices and the way you rhyme (I often write in free verse)
The meter of your poems emphasizes the thoughts and emotions you aptly express.
Thank you for your extensive comment. My choice of words is often how I literally see a situation. Feels a bit like cheating but it's just the way writing/thought-processing works best for me.
Glad you like it.
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